Calling all writers!! What do you think of my story?

It's good really! You have a good story on your hands. But before you right too much, you want to right down some basic information (from personal experiences), such as: what your characters are like, and just kind of get to know them. If you don't it will sound very uneducated, trust me. And when your writing, you don'y want to use trying-to-sound-sohpisticated sentences like the first one. A good way to rephrase that would be: The sight of first question placed on the test before, sends a sickly feeling to the pit of my stomache. But don't worry, our doing good. When I started writing (like two years ago) I used to write bland all the time like having 'I' at the beginning of every sentence. Try an exercise, by not using 'I' at the beginning of any of your sentences. It brings creativity to your, really. I'm thirteen, but hey I did start before you (: . Hope I helped.